Tuesday, May 24, 2016
use a range of precise vocabulary to communicate meaning (Year ⅞)
use all basic punctuation independently and attempt more complex punctuation (eg semicolons, colons, parentheses) (Year 7/8)
The pieces of my writing that are highlighted green are where I have shown my vocabulary and punctuation goal
David was at home sitting on his couch watching motorbikers racing, Then the mailman came and i sprinted outside and he said this is for David Johnson. And gave me it. Then i ripped it open then read it it said. Dear david you have been invited to a motorbike racing if would like to come it will on Saturday 27 April so you should get ready.
The race is at the race track on the end of frankson street. If you come 1st you win 85,000 dollars 2nd you win 33,000 dollars 3rd you win 10,000 dollars.
David goes to the race he is on his last lap in front of everybody he past the finish line. 2 months later he gets grabs a letter what said to come to an other race at the same place if you would like to he said yes.
When David Got on the train he was ready to race, two laps to go someone's right behind him he takes a right to try and get the guy From behind not right behind him he does that but the guy comes back behind him then he hits his tier so he loses control then he smashed into a wall. The medic came over and picked him up and said your neck is broken we will take you to the hospital and you will be fixed up.
After about 3 months he was out of his neck brace he went home. But he never went back to racing he just drove his motorbike with his mates.